Tuesday, 15 November 2016

My Writing

Hi and welcome back to my blog I will be showing you my writing. HERE IT IS.

WALT develop a story to entertain the reader
Text form: Narrative

Success Criteria
  • Use the Writing Process (Get Ready, Craft, Revising, Editing, Sharing)
  • Structure your narrative through your plan
  • Begins with orientation (setting and main character)
  • Paint a picture with words (descriptive words and actions)
  • Paragraphs (Orientation / Events x3 / Resolution - Ending)
  • My writing goal: Spelling
               Beach Mystery
BANG!! the car door shut.... A nice family hopped out of the car and started to walk along the beach. Step by step they got closer to the boat. As they reached the boat they all
climbed in one by one.  Lusey is a 6 year old girl with light blue eyes and wavy long blond hair. Her favourite outfit is a blue short t’shirt, black leggings, blue sneakers and purple socks she also has purple stud earrings. So Lusey climbs out of the boat to have a swim
But following her was….
Her big sister Erica who is 11 years old with light blue eyes, wavy long blond and brown hair which is worn out. Her favourite outfit is a purple short t shirt with dark blue leggings,blue socks and purple sneakers.

They went for a swim. Then when they got back to shore they quickly got changed into their clothes while their parents were talking.
Lusey ran off along the beach and went exploring in the bush as normal. Her sister raced after her to try and stop her from getting lost.
Erica lost track of herself and started to follow Lusey. They slowly climbed up a small hill when they got to the top they were surrounded by bush they struggled through the bush.
When they finally got through the bush Erica realised something they were lost.
They tried to come out of the bush. Finally they managed to come out but their dad’s car was  not there.
Lusey burst into tears she said ‘where has mummy and daddy gone’? Erica replied
‘I don’t know but we will find our way to them’.

They went back into the bush they found a tree Erica said ‘ we will camp here for the night’.
The next morning was a beautiful day the birds were chirping the sea was nice and calm.
They kept on searching for their parents and for sticks.
At last they found a huge bunch of sticks so that they can light a fire Erica learnt to light a fire at school for kids health and safety company.
When they were half way down to the beach they found an old Macdonald's bag with chips and a burger .Lusey said ‘ you can have the burger Erica and I will have the chip’s if that is O.K’ ‘ sure lets just hope the it taste better than it looks said Erica yeah I’m with you on that one said Lusey.

When they got to the beach Erica made a fire and after that they heated up there food. It was almost the afternoon a helicopter travelled over them. they jumped around so that  the helicopter could see them.The helicopter noticed them and took them to the side of the beach where the road was. The Pilot asked Erica what their phone number is ,she said 8728626 is that all asked the Pilot yes replied Ercia. An hour later Lusey and Erica’s mum and dad arrived  to pick them up Lusey and Erica were overwhelmed so was their parents by the look of it after all the hugging and kissing they went home and lived happily ever after.THE END.


  1. wow Taylah that is a amazing narrative story

  2. I love your blog post so much and I love to read all of your blog post to :)

  3. Wow Taylah. that title got me hooked in. You have improved so much. This piece of writing is FANTASTIC.!!! Well done Taylah!!! Keep up the great work!!!